Subject: Re: [C&C] Replica
From: mousse@pixi.com (Mousse Lee)
Date: 8/26/1996, 8:38 PM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com

        Not to be mistaken for the rest of the Replica thread, one thing
that bothered me about the story as I woke up this morning.  If "Revenge"
was Ryoga's son then wouldn't he have noticable pig like features being the
son of a Jusenkyo cursed person.  The Herb/Mint/Lime effect?  Plus being of
Hibiki blood would give him a bad sense of direction, how about Kuroshiro
the family dog?
        Overall a decent fic, brief but to the point.  I believe the point
was made that Ryoga won even though he died, perhaps it could be worthwhile
to have everyone realize this as part of the story.  The first time Ryoga's
succeded at something.  I know the guy is dying and all but have him say a
few things to his "son".  Near the end it's not much of a fight, just Ryoga
getting beat up and "Revenge" ranting.  Why not have Ryoga point out his
death would mean his final victory.  His son could react in a variety of
ways, it is a darkfic afterall.

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