Ok Zen, here it comes.  Set Phasers on, mmmmm, Torture.

Overall:  Letting the Ukyou bias slide, the story is a very interesting
introspective on the workings of Ranma's mind, as well as how everyone
would react to Ranma's condition.

Grammar And Spelling:  Good.  Not many mistakes, if any.

Characters:  Very well written viewinto the inner workings of the
primary characters.  Of course, Zen's bias toward Ukyou did place her in
the limelight a little more than she may have been, but somebody needed
to play peacekeeper.

General:  The fight scenes, very well done.  Zen combined tactics with
action in a smooth flowing scene.  We must still wonder, however, if
Ranma really *DID* let himself get hit by the truck.  Also, when this
Fanfic hit my Mailbox, I noticed a small problem.  It was in several
parts, continued over several messages, and no numbering system to help
piece it together.  I had to dump the lot to printer so I could piece it
together and read it.  It may be a quirk with my mail program, Zen's
mail program, or the ML software, I have no idea.  However, a numbering
system would make piecing it together a lot easier.  ^_^


Very good work.  Keep it up, Zen.  I know that, if you continue it, I
will be looking forward to it.
-- 
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