Overall:  An interesting lead in.  Forshadowing abounds, IMHO, and of
course, we must wait to see if any of it comes to pass or not.

Characters:  As for the Ranma characters, so far, so good.  As for
David, well, we have not seen enough yet to get a feel for his
personality or power level.  Time will tell.

General:  Akane can usually handle Happosai on her own, having Ranma
stop him was only necessary fot the plot.  Happosai could have easily
gone to Ranma-chan for a quick grope and been punted from there.  Plus,
a minor note, some of speak (or read) very little Japanese, and I am
still wondering what Akane muttered in her sleep.  ^_^

All in all, this 'fic bears watching.  Keep it coming, and please, keep
it good! ^_^

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