Forgive this poor soul, as I am not familiar with any if the characters
in this 'fic.  I cannot give any accurate C&C, as of yet, so this will
have to be a general statement.  Still read it, tho, and with the next
few parts, mayhap I can finally do a decent C&C.  ^_^

Waiting for part two!
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