As usual, Ross, real good stuff. I just quiver whenever I see one of
your fics. Well, mentally anyway.
Couple of typos, one He instead of She, that's about it.
Loved the "clue phone". ^_^
What troubles me a little is the incredible timing.
Nabiki flipped through her datebook. "Hmm, a dragon will attack
Joketsuzoku in three days, causing incredible damage but not actually
killing anyone. I may as well send my daughter there; it's an ideal way
to learn how to control herself without actually putting her in mortal
danger."
It does stretch credibility that things come to a head between Brook and
her saurian suitor *just* as Tachi and Shun arrive. Is this a loose end
that will be tied up later?
Glad to hear more coming very soon. :)