Isn't Skuld supposed to be 13 forever?  She never ages, as far as I
know.  I could be wrong about this.

Could be.  She and Kenji get some serious kissing in #2 and 3, though.
I want her older, to avoid certain...taste questions.

Who is this cousin of Keiichi's?  I've never seen him before.

Read Ed Sharpe's "No Mere Mortal", available at cs.ubc.ca.

Also, on more of a plot note.  You don't give a justification for
Keiichi's proposal.  By this I mean that one day, he wakes up and
decides to propose. 

It also uses No Mere Mortal continuity a bit - Keiichi has been 
attempting to propose for a while, but something always got in the
way when they were alone.  That's why he does it in front of
everyone - to try and break the curse.  I'll make that clearer
in Wedding.

Other than that minor concern, the story worked fairly well.  There were
a couple of rough spots - awkward phrasings and all that.  I'd point
them out to you but you've already posted to r.a.a.c, so I'm not sure
that they'd do you much good at this point.  :)

I hate rewriting, anyway. :-)

Looking forward to your next installment.

Thanks!

--Sean Gaffney
--"You git!  I thought you were dead!  Git git git!" - Benny, No Future