<Scott Johnson quotation = ">">

Not bad.  I like it. :-)  Definitely a great concept, hilarious and yet
touching at times.

<Bevis Mode>
Heh-heh! Heh-heh! Heh-heh! He said 'touching', Butthead!

Wyrm-chan: Don't call me Buthead! (mallets Wyrm)

</Bevis Mode>
Whew! I really need to sleep if I'm doing B&B impersonations...

Hmmm... R1/2 : The Butthead Factor. Nahhhh... ;)

It feels a bit awkward at times, though - I think you
got too caught up in the chaos bits to let us get an actual sense for how
the characters were really taking it. It probably would have been helped
if you'd lessened the number of random characters running around (I think
Ryouga, Nabiki and Kasumi added little to the story, for instance, except
to exaggerate the chaotic atmosphere) and gone more into depth on what was
going on inside the heads of the remaining characters.

Takahashi only used them for supporting characters most of the time anyway.
Besides, 'chaos' is the watchword in Ranma 1/2! :)

Also, I think that
Akane was a bit quick to jump to conclusions, even for her - I don't see
how she decided that 'Ranma and Ukyou go to talk in private, with Ukyou
looking sad' = 'Ukyou is pregnant by Ranma.'

Okay, that WAS a bit lame!

All in all, though, it was pretty good even as is, and with a little
polishing and expansion, it could turn into something really good.  Maybe
even the start of a new series of fanfics. :-)  Keep up the good work.

Wyrm-chan: We're up to three now!

<Butthead Mode>
Duhhhhh! What's that mean?

(Wyrm-chan mallets him)
</Butthead Mode>

Tylonol!

<Jon Quirit quotation = ">">

Good fanfic!!!

(takes a bow) THANK YEW!!!

Enjoyed the chaotic nature of how everything when along... sounds like a
typical day for Ranma (Ranma does something, Akane (or one of his fiancees)
blows it out of proportion, soon all of Ranma's friends is trying to beat
the crap out of him).

I just gotta work on making Akane's anger more plausable.

But I got one question, where did the title "Expansion Card" come from?  Are
you one of those Ani-Mayhem players? ^^

Um, no... I'm talking about a computer expansion card (like a memory module
or a video card). Just as an expansion card increases a computer's
capabilities, Ukyou has increased the capability of the Saotome family.

Wyrm-chan: (strikes another pig off the board [MPFC]) We're up to four.

Soon...

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Uh oh!

<Kergma quotation = ">">

The list *itself* is writing fanfics?  Aiya.

Is that not its purpouse? Why let RAAC have all the fun? ^_^

Wyrm-chan: Five!

Thank you, Wyrm-chan...

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