The story seems ok with me.

On Wed, 14 Aug 1996, Richard Lawson wrote:

So I thought I'd ask y'all, the ones who stayed silent:  What did you
think, really, of that story?  Should it die and never see the light of
day?  Was it so-so, maybe okay but not okay?  Or is it that you just
don't like lemons in general? (I actually fall into that category.)

-Richard