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TALES OF RANMA AND NABIKI:  HERE'S RANMA!
by Jeff Rutsch
*Grammar:  7  AHHHH!! Indent indent!!  I got confused on the
dialogues.
*Story: 8  Great... It's like Elsworlds.
*Characters: 8  Handled extremely well
*Humor: 5
*Overall: 8  One of Jeff's best works.  One thing I love about
Jeff's works though is that his stories are always short and to
the point.  

KIMAGURE ORANGE COLLEGE PT1
by Stephen Tsai and a whole slew of other ppl.
*Grammar: 8
*Story: 8  This is KOR people.  Stephen brings back the triangle
again by introducing a new character.  It's actually KOR in
College and replacing Hikaru with someone else.  But this is
still good.
*Characters: 8 Excellent.
*Humor: 3
*Overall: 8.9  Very nice, I can't wait till I read more.

UNTITLED
by Mousse Lee
*Grammar: 8
*Story: 7  I assumed that Mousse came to Neko for something.. but
what?
*Characters: 8  Almost realistic
*Drama: 2
*Overall: 6.3  So. where did Mousse go?  Anyway, nice.... good
for your first time.

STORM'S END
by Richard Lawson 
*Grammar: 7
*Story: 8  A Lawson story, what else?
*Characters: 8
*Drama: 8
*Overall: 8  Let me show you something that bothered me in this
fic...
"Akane nodded violently. "Yes! That's exactly right. He denied
saying it, he never said it. I mean, I know that he feels it, and
he knows that he can't really hide it, but he lacks the courage
to actually say it. He is such a jerk, an idiot, he thought he
had all the time in the world to say it, he never knew that time
was running out, that he would leave me and he'd never get the
chance to say it..." She was talking faster and louder as she
went on. She ended by jumping up, her fists clenched at her
sides, shouting up at the ceiling, "RANMA NO BAKA!" 
     Now, this paragraph was near the half way point in the fic. 
That last word, "Ranma no Baka" killed the mood.  Never do this
again.  Fortunately, you stopped the baka usage after this point. 
Fics like this should never used cliched Japanese phrases.

WITHIN THE CANDLE-FLAME
by Christopher Willmore
Grammar: 7
Story: 8  Good irony... but too obvious
Characters: 7
Humor: 4
Overall: 7  This reminded me of Roald Dahl's short story "Pig." 
I don't know why, but it does.  

Now, if there is any story that you want me to review, just tell me.  I will look for it in my HD; if they are not there, I'll ask you for it.  So far I have 95 reviews.  When I finish with my homepage, I'll post them up.