Liked the first chapter. You _will_ write more than one chapter, yes?
And before the next ice age? ;)
   Good reactions from the characters; especially liked Nabiki's
"Will-Take-Him-For-All-He's-Worth-Or-Know-The-Reason-Why" attitude. Poor
guy. ;) Be careful not to be sold into slavery.
   There's a fairly easy solution to the language thing - in anime,
everyone speaks Japanese.
   Too early to tell, but a promising start.

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