Not knowing half the shows used in this, it's kinda hard to give good
C&C. But what I understood, I liked.
   Dialogue and actions good and IC as far as I know. Grammar suffered at
points; mostly awkward phrasing and run-on sentences.
   Like the villain-type's wardrobe. ;)
   Good begining, but really only a prologue. Kick out chapter 1 soon.

- Mike of No Particular Title or Handle
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