On Sat, 10 Aug 1996, Richard Lawson wrote:

It all sounds very good if you can bring it all together.  I wonder if
it's too intricately plotted for a "script" style story.  Is there any
rule against writing the "normal" way in Elsewolrds?  You may want to
consider it, to get rid of some of the awkward scenes you have to create
to convey the plot.  It'll only get worse.

Else 4 was text style.  Bokkenhearted is also being written in text style.
 

Grr, I want to be more helpful, but I can't.  Just write it, dang it! 
If you can bring all the plot elements together without getting bogged
down in heavy dialogue, and with just the right touch of humor, this
will be a good story - certainly better than "Nail".  Go at it, and
write write write!

John biiidas Richard :)

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