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ELSEWORLDS PT 1:  FOR A WANT OF A NAIL
by John Biles
*Grammar: 8
*Story: 8  First Elsworlds story... almost blew me away.
*Characters:  8  good
*Humor: 7
*Overall: 9  Very nice.

ELSEWORLDS PT 4: LOOKING DOWN THE BARREL OF A GLOMP
by Stefan Gagne
*Grammar: 8
*Story: 8
*Characters: 8 Kaneda was very nicely portrayed, except that he seemed like a male Akane.
*Humor: 6
*Overall: 9  Another good one from the Elseworlds series.

ELSEWORLDS PT 3:  AKANE 1/2
by Jeffery Hosmer
*Grammar:  7  dialoug in the beginning seemed choppy to me...
*Story:  8  Good
*Characters: 7  
*Humor: 7
*Overall: 8.9  This got the lowest score out of the 3 Elseworlds... but it's my favorite one.  Go figure.

OBSESSION
by Jang Choe
Grammar: 3  What is this?  Did you forget to check it?
Story:  4  A boring, overdone piece of crap.  All he does is looking for trainers... really unoriginal, and it rambles.
Characters: 4  Well, Mousse isn't strong enough to do all that!  Think man!!
Drama: 1  I guess you tried to make it dramatic.
Overall: 2.3  That 0.3 was your trying to make this interesting.  How about you stop writing fanfics?

RANMA 1/2:  SHATTERED DREAMS
by Kevin Eav
*Grammar:  8  Wow, nice writing style.
*Story:  8  Very symbolic
*Characters: 6  
*Drama: 7
*Overall: 8  This is a weird story, yet ANOTHER Akane's death story.  I read too many of those, and I haven't seen Storm's End yet.  Nice use of discripted words, and good use of foresight.

CRYS OAV #3
by Chris Schumacher
*Grammar: 8
*Story: 7 Kinda interesting
*Characters: 7
*Humor: 5  Not at all funny as your orginal ones.
*Overall: 7  come on, you can do better, Chris.