On Tue, 6 Aug 1996, yinyang wrote:
RANMA 1/2: Girls' Night Out
by Jeffrey Paul Hosmer
*Grammer: 8
*Story: 5 a yawner
I'd disagree and give it an 8, but everyone seems to like to beat on this
story...sigh.
FURIKAN SUMMER PARTS 2 & 3
by John Biles
*Grammar: 8. I saw a few mistakes
*Story: 9.8 Excellent, excellent, excellent.
Woo woo! Thanks :)
*Characters: 9 They develop extremely nicely
*Humor: 8 Some parts are I thought extremely funny.
*Overall: 9.99 Definitely one of the top ten Fanfics written in
my category. It's up there with Elseworlds, Stepping Stones, and
Crys Saga. (Hey, I loved Crys Saga okay!?)
Cool :) Thanks!
THE CRYS SAGA THE WHOLE THING
by Chris Schumacher
*Grammar: 6
*Story: 9 Otaku wish fulfillment at its finest
*Character: 9 Loooong story helps this to develop the number of
characters Chris created.
*Humor: 9 Some are stupid, some are funny, and some were stupid-
funny. Few John Biles type humor also.
What exactly is John biles type humor, if I may ask? :)
CHILDHOOD'S END
by Lizsue
*Grammar: 6 Needs to be better organized. Caping all of the
letters in Character's names really hurt the flow I think... for me anyway.
*Story: 7 Interesting story... it could have been better if it
was more organized. The story flow was a little choppy.
*Characters: 6
*Humor: 5 Not much of it
*Drama: 8 That ending was... I don't know how to put it.
*Overall: 6.9 Ranma dies.... cool! I was waiting till that day
came. But in a way, a sad ending. But I don't know if that was
intended to be a sad ending or not. I felt, when I was reading this, that
you didn't really care about this fanfic.
I'd give this story a 1, maybe a 1.5 for at least not having a gratuitous
sex scene...but then I spewed all over this tory when it came out.(It got
the last of my Mystery Fanfic Commentary Theatre 3000s...)
PUTTING YOUR HEART IN THE RIGHT PLACE
by John Biles
*Grammar: 7 Structure seemed a little weak in the beginning.
My first fanfic, and my first story since high school that I let other
people actually SEE :)
*Characters: 7 Unlike Biles. Maybe this is his first story... or
was it Elseworlds?
This was my first story. When I started it, I had seen four ranma
episodes, read 2 issues of the Viz translated Manga, and read six fanfics
and the People, places, things, file :)
To say the least, I didn't know diddly squat when I started it.
*Story: 9 Excellent. Haven't read a bad Biles story yet.
*Humor: 6 Not much..
*Drama: 8 I found this too be more dramatic then humorous.
*Lemon: .1 all that necking and smooching...
*Overall: 9. Unfortuanly I read Furikan Summer before I read
this. So I knew what was going to happen. Still, excellent piece of
reading. I found this to be more dramatic and even philosophical. A
definite good read. Another good job
My first good job :)
UNTITLED
by JW Biles
*Grammar: 7
*Characters: 7 handled in the usual Bile fashion
*Story: 8
*Humor: 5
*Overall: 8 Not finished so I don't know if this gets any better.*
Umm...what was the plot? Maybe I finished it...but I don't know which
story this is :)
John Walter Biles : MA-History, Ph.D Wannabe at U. Kansas
ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu bailesu@komodo.hacks.arizona.edu
http://www.komodo.hacks.arizona.edu/~bailesu/falcon.html
http://www.dhp.com/~wraven/john/index.html
"It's good to kill the King." "I still think the Saxons should have
put a higher price on our heads. I'm more valuable than 25 librum."
--Frequent quotes from our PENDRAGON sessions.