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From: 	Ranma al'Thor <ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu>[SMTP:ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu]
Sent: 	Wednesday, August 07, 1996 8:47 PM
To: 	fanfic@fanfic.com
Subject: 	Re: [FFML] [C&C]Piccolo's Fanfic C&C's

What exactly is John biles type humor, if I may ask? :)

I'm not going to tell you.  If I did, you'll be trying to do your humor the way I told you think you do, and it won't be funny. 
 

CHILDHOOD'S END
by Lizsue
*Grammar: 6  Needs to be better organized.  Caping all of the
letters in Character's names really hurt the flow I think... for me anyway.  
*Story: 7  Interesting story...  it could have been better if it
was more organized.  The story flow was a little choppy.
*Characters: 6 
*Humor:  5  Not much of it
*Drama:  8  That ending was... I don't know how to put it.
*Overall: 6.9  Ranma dies.... cool!  I was waiting till that day
came. But in a way, a sad ending.  But I don't know if that was
intended to be a sad ending or not.  I felt, when I was reading this, that
you didn't really care about this fanfic.

I'd give this story a 1, maybe a 1.5 for at least not having a gratuitous 
sex scene...but then I spewed all over this tory when it came out.(It got 
the last of my Mystery Fanfic Commentary Theatre 3000s...)

	The worst story on my reviews got a 4.  I don't think anyone who is brave enough to write a story deserve a 1.  But unless they kill everybody off, misspells  everything from "it" to uhhh.... a really long, hard word,  written in a language he/she made up, puts himself in the anime universe and rules it with an iron fist, and insults the orginal creator right in the face.... I guess that'll be a 1.

PUTTING YOUR HEART IN THE RIGHT PLACE
by John Biles
*Grammar: 7  Structure seemed a little weak in the beginning.

My first fanfic, and my first story since high school that I let other 
people actually SEE :)

  	Oh boy, let me see those "UNSEEN" ones, I'll give you a low score on something. 

by JW Biles
*Grammar: 7
*Characters: 7 handled in the usual Bile fashion
*Story: 8
*Humor: 5
*Overall: 8  Not finished so I don't know if this gets any better.*

Umm...what was the plot?  Maybe I finished it...but I don't know which 
story this is :)

	It was when Ryouga comes back to the Tendo Dojo as P-chan.  Akane and P-chan was in the bath tub.  Ryouga wanting to stay with Akane to comfort her.  That's all I can remember.

By the way, you know that Elseworlds story I was going to write to you? I found out something, no wonder David is haveing a hard time with it.  It is going absolutely nowhere.  Agg, I might finish it in 5 years and give it to you to look at.  Oh, this is piccolo@cyber.atlanta.com in another e-mail address.