At 05:30 PM 8/3/96 -0400, you wrote:

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                               "Sabishisa"
                              ("Loneliness")

                     An Original Ranma ½ Fan Fiction
                                   by
                                 Mi-chan
                            (Michelle Mista)
                        Washuu-chan's #1 Student!
                (formerly mi-chan@ix.netcom.com)
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        [snip]

    "Akane all right?" Shampoo asked Mousse. "Why Ranma crying
so much? Why Ryouga cry too?"

    Mousse bowed his head, and turned a little away, taking
Shampoo with him. "Shampoo," he said gently, catching her by the
arm as she started to go towards Ranma. "I don't think you should
go to Ranma right now."

    "Why? Mousse jealous?" Shampoo guessed. She grinned
wickedly. "Shampoo go Ranma."

    "Shampoo." Mousse's voice was tight, firm, almost angry.
Shampoo stopped in surprise. Mousse had never, ever addressed her
like that. "Leave Ranma alone. Tendo Akane's gone."

    "What Mousse mean gone?" Shampoo wanted to know. She pointed
to Ranma. "She right there. Ranma hold violent Akane."

    "Shampoo," Mousse took her by the arm, and Shampoo squirmed
in his grip. "Akane is _dead_." Shampoo looked blank. "She's
dead. She's not alive any more. That's why Ranma's crying."

    "Akane... dead?" Shampoo turned once again to watch Ranma as
he cried over the body of his iinazuke. "Ranma...." She turned to
Mousse with tears in her eyes. "Shampoo no really like Akane, but
Shampoo sad she dead now," she told him. "Shampoo want kill Akane
before, but now, Shampoo see Ranma so sad. Shampoo glad she no
kill Akane. Shampoo never think that Ranma really love violent
girl like Akane so much. Ranma never say he love Akane."

    "Hai," Mousse told her. "But he showed her in his own way...
and he's only telling her after she's dead...."

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        Only a thought, but is it possible that Shampoo is being
a little too verbose here.  Not a serious point :-)

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        [ another snip ]

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    <SPLASH!> "Baka!"

    "Na-nani?!" Ranma-chan sat up on her futon, soaking wet. She
gasped. "Akane?!"

    Akane laughed and showed Ranma the pail that she'd used to
soak him with. "Really, Ranma you should learn how to get up
earlier in the mornings!" She grinned. "You sleep like the dead,
you know!"

    Ranma bristled a little at the word "dead". 

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        Ah, yes.  The old "Who Shot JR" angle.  Nice touch.
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^_^ Please send all C & C to:

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        Mi-chan, you don't really need C&C.  You need an
audience.  An outstanding story that sticks to the 
Takahashi character mold well.
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      Citizen_Al@aol.com 
      (I want my old Netcom account back!!! Waaahhh!!)

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        As for your AOL affliction, I can only imagine what
it cost you to post this.  (Do I hear 'second job' to pay
for the connect charges?)
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        [ last snip ]

Ja ne!

Mi-chan
(currently Citzen_Al@aol.com)
(I HATE AOL.)

  ^^^^^^^^^^
This proves you are an intelligent life form.


        -- Uncle Fester 
        (Still hiding in the basement.  It's tornado season, you know.)

        





Greg Sandborn	(aka: Uncle Fester)

Home on the range at:	sandborn@microlink.net
			sandborn@burnsmcd.com


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Pushing the envelope of fan fiction till my stamp gets canceled.