On Wed, 17 Jul 1996 02:33:14 -0700 (PDT) Mike W. Loader said:

:    I started reading this with fairly low expectations. Why? Well, it
: looked to embody a venerable old fanfic cliche - A new character, often
: the gaijin avatar of the author (and a martial artist to boot) shows up in
: Nerima, and promptly causes Nabiki to fall in love with him. At best, they
: tend to be generic and uninteresting, and at worse they're the worst kind
: of otaku-daydream-wishfufillment.
:    Surprise! I really liked it.

I have absolutely nothing to add to your masterful C&C, but I'll
post this anyway, to show that there were others that liked it.
I agree on every single point.


:    Jeff seemed a little too perfect. He had depth, and things didn't
: always favor him, but he never seemed to make any serious mistakes, or
: just plain be wrong. I also felt his martial art abilities were something
: that could have been left out; they didn't really play a part in his
: relationship with Nabiki, and reenforce the otaku-wish-fufillment charge.

The only gripe I had with the fic, but it didn't really show *too*
often.  At one or two moments it slightly spoiled my enjoyment,
but overall, it was mostly kept in the background.


:    I shouldn't have liked it. You aren't supposed to like these kind of
: fics, but I did anyway. If you haven't read it, I recomend taking a look.
: Hope to see more from the author. :)

Same here.  The announced future parts sound highly interesting.


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