This fic seemed to be full of basic grammatical errors. ("Me and Nene..." 
to name one) Not being to great of speller, I didn't really notice 
anything there, and I think Priss would be a little more observant, 
especially when entering an unfamiliar place. The unlocked door on the 
hotel room should have tipped her off that "something is not right." 
I thought I read a lot of never-ending sentences, much like Larry 
McMurtry's style of writing. 

	Thomas Hamill