I see how this story is developing.  Akane gets run over by a car and Ranma 
blames himself for it.  While this kind of idea has been used several times, I don't see 
a problem with that.  Just make sure that you tie the Ranma & Akane relationship really 
well.  Obviously you should write about the incident that killed Akane in the future 
parts, as well as how Ranma will cope with what he has done.  I'll save my C & C for 
later.  Keep writing!  

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"RANMA NO BAKA!" Akane Tendo, Ranma 1/2

"Power only breeds war ... I wish I'd never been born." Celes Chere, Final Fantasy 3

Don Wang <dwang@sprynet.com>
RPG, strategy game, and Ranma 1/2 fan.