Subject: Re: [FFML] Very Alpha version of Ranma Nibun No Ichi 7
From: "Richard D. Lawson" <sterman@sprynet.com>
Date: 7/1/1996, 2:49 PM
To: kunoichi@yoyo.cc.monash.edu.au
CC: Fanfic Mailing List <fanfic@fanfic.com>

This is good for a "very alpha" version.

Only one thing really bothers me.  I just don't believe Ranma could kill 
Cologne in cold blood.  Yes, he's mad about his daughter, but he has her 
beaten and bloodied in front of him.  I just don't think he'd turn into 
a murderer, no matter what the provocation.  My personal opinion, of 
course.

Very little lemon here.  Quite a change of pace from the "lemon-fest" of 
Part 6.  :)

Where do you go from here?  It seems all you've got left is the boring
descriptions of families being raised.  Unless you're planning on doing 
a "Ranma/Cosby" crossover.  :)

I must say, I think your writing has improved tremendously.  This is a 
much better written piece than your earlier fics, especially the first 
couple.  Keep it up!

And please do write more!!

:)