Way cool.  If I were you, I'd just end it there and work on improving the 
one scene.  Then again, that's just me.  

Only real C&C: Kodachi's drugging herself being the reason of her sitting 
there enjoying the day.  Having Kodachi enjoy the day is very 
interesting: it's not out of character, but it's not something you'd 
expect of her, either...so it really makes the reader ask "why?"  It 
might make for interesting character study if the answer is something 
mental rather than "because she accidentally drugged herself."

IMHO,

Jeff

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