Subject: Re: [FFML] [FF] Thy Inward Love, Part 10 - One Part of Two
From: "Mike W. Loader" <mloader@scs.unr.edu>
Date: 6/24/1996, 12:34 AM
To: Fanfic Mailing List

On Fri, 21 Jun 1996, Richard D. Lawson wrote:

Here it is, the final installment of my series.  It is *very* rough - I
didn't even reread it after I finished.  I just need to get it away from
me.  :)

It didn't look all that rough to me....


That's not to say I don't want your C&C.  On the contrary, I would very 
much appreciate it.  I cover a lot of ground in this piece, and I want 
your perspectives.

Overall - It was one of the better, if not the best, "Let's end the
series" fics that I've read. Many of the story elements - the Kuno/Nabiki
relationship, the analysis of Genma and Ranma, the wrapup with Ryoga and
Ranma - were handled with wonderful skill.

   I admit to being unsatisfied with a couple bits. Just packing Kodachi
away in a home seemed rather weak and artificial....almost as if the
author just wanted a way to get her out of his hair (not that I blame him
:) ). And I didn't feel that Kuno was done IC in the beginning...too
reasonable, with too much empathy and concern. IMHO. ;)

I'm still amazed at how quickly the whole thing was written. Either you
have a whole lot of spare time, or you type really fast. Even more amazing
is the fact that the speed certainly didn't seem to impare the quality of
the fic.

Bravo.


This is very long - I hope not too long.  Let me know if it gets cut off 
or anything.  The last line should read "THE END".

I now know why people have a hard time finishing series.  This took a 
lot out of me.  I plan to take a little rest, then rework the whole 
series. 

I know what you mean. There's always a feeling of "It needs something
more....is the end final enough? Did I wrap up all the plot strings? Did
it work?"
   Rewrites can be hard. I'm having a tough time reworking Nameless;
pruning ones own writing is not a job for the squeamish.

I do want to thank everyone for their kind words and great feedback.  I 
don't know if any more fanfics are in my future.  Maybe, but it's hard 
to think creative thoughts right now.  :)

Please, write more!
   Try changing the mood for the next piece. HoH, RSoL, and TIL were all
done in the same style; serious-but-wry third person. I've found that
switching moods and formats does wonders to clear the mind and build up
enthusiasm.

- Mike of No Particular Title or Handle
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