Hiya Jack...

  Alright... well I recieved your fic a little while ago.. and this is 
the first free minute I've had to respond... *groan* I'm tired at the 
moment (I had to get up at 6am this morning.... on a bloody SUNDAY.. to 
have a game of Skirmish with some mates....at the moment I'm one large 
bruise...:)

  OK... the story... well.. firstly Jack beat Ryouga too easily... far 
too easily... and I also don't get why Ryouga's attacking him.. I mean I 
really don't think he'd be attacking Jack cause he managed to take away 
one of Ranma's potential brides.... I mean he might be a little annoyed.. 
but not enough to kill/maim/destroy... (yeah I know Ryouga overreacts a 
bit.. but I think it's still out of character...)

  Hmmm... other than that I can't think of anything else..... Tho I 
would have thought that Cologne would now be pushing to have Jack *MARRY* 
Shampoo as soon as possible (after what went on)...


  Well.. nuff said.. I liked it overall...

-----Brett

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Spock: Sir, what these people are saying is logical; If we use up a 
       finite resource, logic dictates that eventually all 
       resources will be exhausted and the resulting calamity 
       will expunge all life forms...
Kirk:  Meaning???
Spock:  We're rooted....

  -----Fast Forward (1989)
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