Date: Wed, 19 Jun 1996 17:31:20 -0500 (CDT)
   From: hitomi ichinchei <hitomi@terminal.autobahn.mb.ca>

   On Tue, 18 Jun 1996, Richard D. Lawson wrote:

   > I'm curious; did you find the bit about the tea ceremony slow?  Should I 
   > add more?  Would it interest you to know all the details of a tea 
   > ceremony, or would it just turn you off to read all that stuff?

   Actually, I found it inaccurate.

Its big problem is that it gives both too much and too little detail.

By this I mean that in a few places the author goes into quite a bit
of mechanical detail (with nothing completely inaccurate, at least
from my memory of Hitomi's notes on tea ceremony and what else I've
read on the subject); however, so much else at that level of detail is
left out or described in the abstract that I doubt it presents an
accurate picture.

One strong suggestion: try to adjust things so that you give it a
feeling that's more, well, deliberate is not quite the right word, but
I think you certainly need to devote more words to it, and try harder
to create a mood.  This is a *very* important event for Kasumi and Tofu....

Try reading Hitomi's notes which are in the appendix of one of the
chapters of her "A Son's Duty".

					- Harold