well, here it is.. you asked, and someone was kind enough to tell me how.

Stormwalker presents :


                          Bubblegum Collision
                              
           A Bubblegum Crisis fanfic by Douglas A. Reeves

I've got to say I'm enjoying this one.  I've only got a couple problems with
what I've read, and both have to do with what happened to Nene.  First,
Sylia's initial reaction to Nene's injuries.  I don't think she'd fall apart
that way quite so publicly (I'm one of those who thinks Sylia is probably a
mess in private though)

I read in other posts that this story takes place several years down the
line, and Sylia's 'walls' have come down quite a bit over the years.  Maybe
if you added a line, sort of like an intro, to say what year we are in.
Something like "MegaTokyo, 2045" or whenever it is.

The other problem I have has to do with Nene's treatment: when did Sylia
become a MD and a cybernetic surgeon?  I can sort-of buy the KS taking care
of 'routine' injuries themselves (although I sort of suspect Sylia's got
medical support on-call).  But if Nene was hurt *that* badly, wouldn't Sylia
use her connections to get her to a specialist, rather than treat Nene herself?

Keep up the good work :)



Jeanne Hedge

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