Part 2

Yay!

   Kasumi fell. Or maybe she rose, it was hard to tell.

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   She looked out into the maelstrom, and tried to catch her 
bearings. Scenes came into focus...

The maelstrom in the mirror worked well, I liked the Kasumi view point in 
the flashbacks.

   Whatever was wrong, it was a safe bet that it was all Ranma's 
fault. Okay. Time to start watching Ranma.

Heh.

   In a back room in downtown Tokyo, a tall, slightly overweight 
man fired a automatic with cool precision, taking down his last 
target. A quick survey of the room showed five corpses. No escapes. 
Good.

I like the way you portray the assassin.  It has that video cam in the 
corner feel.

   The man moved steathly down the hall of the dojo, looking for a 
good place to hide the bundle he carried. Dressed in a black costume 
akin to a ninja or cat burglar's, he had a definite air of the feline to 
him. On the bundle, a timer slowly tore away seconds.

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   He looked up at the stupid, vacant-eyed girl, choked, and fell into 
blackness.

The dojo at night sceen was really cool.  I liked the killers perspective 
through the whole sceen.

   They've left the window unlocked. Good. She just needed to lift 
the pane....there we go.....climb through, mind the sill, tripping and 
falling is the last thing you need. My goodness, it's actually fairly 
tidy in here. It's......a kitchen. With pots and jars and racks and 
drawers and is that an apron hanging on the door? Do monsters like 
him wear aprons, just like me? Do they cook meals for their 
families and friends, and feel pride in it? How can they do that and 
then go out and do such horrible things?

I like the way Kasumi notices the "domestic" side of the assassins home.

   ...She felt something break inside, and the pain moved in a 
different direction and the laughing speared through her and she 
couldn't reach the pan for some reason...

You did a good job with Kasumi's mind wandering while she gets beat up.

   Silence for a few moments. "You're.....Kasumi Tendo?"

   "Yes. Is something wrong, Police Examiner?"

   "I'm sorry, Miss Tendo. There seems to have been a mistake. Good 
night."

Nice touch.

   Great big thank you's go to Harvey Griffin, Matt Trotter, Joyce 
Torres?, Kergma, and especially Travis Butler. And those who 
wrote C&C, well, bless you. :)

Look mom I got a thank you in a fanfic!

Great story.  You realy gave Kasumi a character.  I can't wait to see 
what you do next.
   -MJT