I'd like to hear your thoughts, of course.  Let me know!

OK, I thought the part with Genem thinking about going back to Pando form
was good.  Unless this will be a VERY long series, have his progress be much
slower than Ranma's, perhaps even be incomplete when you do end it (but let
us know it will be continuing)

Ukyou is the calmest of the other fiances so it was a good choice to start.
Maybe she can help Akane and Ranma with the others as part of her own recovery.

Where is Akane's scar?  Yes I know you said it will be only noticable up
close, but still it will be there.  Also how long is it.

Medical note, when you suture (stich) a facial wound, standard practice is
to use a lot of small diameter sutures.  And you take out half of them 24
hours after they are put in and gradudaly remove more of them.  If the next
chapter takes place during this  period you might want to make note of that
fact.  In fact if you consider my earlier suggestion about Ukyou helping
this might be how she starts, going with Akane (with or with out Ranma
Present) to either the E.R. or to Doctor Tofu.

Oh, and I tried writing this using a different editor; let me know if 
you get any strange symbols or spacing when you receive it.

Didn't see any with my copy.
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