Windlily,
I wanted to give you some good C&C on this, because you've given me such
excellent feedback. It took me a couple of days since I like to print
the long ones out, but I was out of printing paper.
Unfortunately, I can't tell you a lot because I have no idea what the
heck is going on. I imagine that's the biggest reason for the silence
you've been getting; no one has read the previous parts.
I will say this: your prose is excellent. It's so nice to see people
with good writing skills to go along with good imagination - so often
the two are mutually exclusive.
Also (and you should take this as high praise since I normally don't
much try to keep up with serials) I do find it interesting enough to go
ahead and read the other parts of your story. Do you have it archived
somewhere?
Don't get discouraged and stop writing; talent like yours shouldn't be
wasted. Let me get up to speed on this plot and I'll give you some real
C&C.
Let me warn you, it may take a while. The time I don't spend agonizing
over my fanfic is being spent reading "A Crown of Swords", so catching
up with your stories will take a little time.
Do please let me know where I can get them, though.