On Wed, 05 Jun 1996 19:05:19 -0700 Misa-chan said:

: A Lesson in Love
: Chapter 9: Confessions

:         Nabiki grinned, a roll of film in her hands. She held the
: most... VALUABLE... pictures of her career clutched tightly to her

The most valuable?  How so?

: 	Ranma grabbed Nabiki by the shoulders and slammed her up
: against the wall, shocking her and causing her to let the film drop
: from her fingers.
:         "No idea, huh?" he said as he leaned down and picked it up.
: He crushed it in his hand and let the remains crumble to the ground.
: Ranma turned and looked at Nabiki, his eyes filled with disgust.
: Nabiki shivered and sank down the wall, still horrified that Ranma
: had actually pushed her.
:         Ranma said, quietly, "Nabiki, you're such a bitch. I thought
: about it this morning...

Misa-chan, this scene need thorough re-working.  Due to the
changed nature of the photos Ranma is severely overreacting here.
I can picture him doing that over the lemonish snapshots, but not
over the photos Nabiki took in your new version.

: and I realized that there was no way you
: could have missed what was going on between Akane and me last night,
: not with you being so nosy.

Were they?  It was more pure luck that Nabiki caught them right on
their first evening.  Cutting Nabiki's speech of self-
justification was a good beginning to tone this scene down, but
Ranma still comes across as too crass in his actions, to me.

Everything else was just as good as we've come to expect of you,
Misa-chan.  Don't keep us waiting too long for more. :)


Sebastian
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