Marisa,

As always, a good job.  I hope you can bring a good resolution to Akari 
if you're going to continue this Ukyo-Ryoga thing.  I kinda like Akari; 
I'm glad to see her put in an appearance.

One small thing that bothered me:  did Ranma and Nabiki know that she 
carried 36 pictures of blackness?  I mean, there couldn't have been near 
enough light in that room for any pictures to come out.  Nabiki would 
have needed a flash, and while Akane and Ranma might miss a flash or two 
in their passion, I have a hard time believing they would miss 36!

Unforunately, I can't think of a way out of this, unless you want to 
give her some sort of infrared camera.  Or maybe she could have made 
some sound recordings; they would be interesting!

Or maybe, you could ignore this as too much nitpicking and dismiss it 
completely.  :)

Eagerly awaiting chapter 10,

Richard

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