At 02:02 AM 6/3/96 -0500, you wrote:

  As to actual C&C however...
  My only big problem with this installment was Nabiki's breaking >down

when Ranma confronted her about the photos. Her speech about

being the one charged with maintaining the dojo seemed _very_
contrived to me indeed.

I agree. I am not all that comfortable with writing about Nabiki.

  My suggestion: just have Ranma confront her and put the terror of
God in her, as he did before, though perhaps even more aggressively
("I don't hit girls; don't make me make an exception in your case").

Wow.... this is good stuff. Can I use this quote? This is a very very
good idea... thanks.

  I did find the scene where Ukyo reworks her boy's uniform outfit
in a feminine mode a tiny bit peculiar. You appeared to be still in
somewhat of a lemon mood; I found the mental image of Ukyo with her
jacket open a little...ah...distracting...(H_H) I really can't see

Well... I am trying to do two things here 1. explore Ukyou's
femininity and 2. add to the sexual tension between her and Ryouga.

I was mearly expounding on the slightly lemonish scene in part 7 
where she is looking in the mirror. This is an adult story, where I
am trying to put together how the characters actually feel and what
they are thinking... so there might be lemony bits every once and a
while without going too far. Ever read Careful Destiny? Gosh I liked
that story... that is the mood I am trying to achieve.

her going to school dressed quite as you described, even if she were

hey!! I dress like that!! ^_^

trying to look more feminine. (i take it she's got very little on
underneath the tank top. 

no no no!! She just usually bound her breasts, and she was now wearing
a bra. This isn't a see-though top either! ^_^

"...in all their glory"...ahem. Um. She _was_ planning on buttoning 

hee hee. ^_^

her 

jacket, I hope? :) )

yup yup. ^_-

  Seriously, Ukyo does seem a bit more surprised at Ryoga's reaction than 
I expect she'd be. She has observed first hand his violent reaction to 
even the merest glimpses of feminine glories several times. In any case, 

She knows she knows!! She's teasing him on purpose. She just didn't
expect him to be THAT shocked.

she does underestimate the "femininity" of her garb a bit more than >I'd 
expect. Her intent _was_ to look a bit more desirable, I >understand...

Not really desirable, just more feminine and less masculine. Only to
YOU, a guy, does more feminine probably mean more desireable ^_^

  Otherwise, chapter nine was thoroughly enjoyable. More, please...! 

soon! Hafta graduate you know ^_^

-Misa
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