Hi Misa,

I pulled the entire story (as it stands now, anyway) from the remailer, and
I'm very impressed. :)

There are *just* a couple things though (aren't there always? <g>)

This is from Part 2:

	"Akane," Kasumi said, looking sad, "You are just as insecure and
just as unable to say how YOU feel.  I think a lot of that has to do with
our losing our mother, we have all been a little closed since then, scared
to show our love "...As our mother did..." 

I think you've got one too many quotation marks here

And from the Part 8 Lemon section:

    Ranma nodded, elated that she was wet for him her first time, and
began to kiss her again, trying to nurse those emotions and coax her into
inhibition. 

I *really* don't think Ranma wants to coax Akane *into* inhibition <g>


Great job :)

Jeanne Hedge

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