On Sun, 26 May 1996, Harold Ancell wrote:
Date: Sun, 26 May 1996 19:07:49 -0400 (EDT)
From: "Erik L. Schweitzer" <elschwei@mtu.edu>
I think you wrapped it up very well.
Agreed. SPOILERS BELOW; if you read this message before you read part
A of the ending, YOU'LL REGRET IT!
(I'm going switch to addressing the author.)
I really liked the foreshadowing in the first part, although I didn't
quite put it together in time. I was really wondering what was going
to happen to you in this life or the next when some Valkyries looked
you up for portraying them as tarts....
Well.... I guess I could have 'toned them down' a bit... but remember
Valkyries are suppose to 'take care of' those honoured warriors that make
it to Asgard... and somehow keeping a bunch of warriors happy would
probably take more than just polite conversation and the occasional
beer....
Although you didn't intend it, I also thought something was wrong due
to the great condition Yggdrasil was in after the "Root Rot" had
attacked it; you could put something in the real Heaven part early on
about it being a bit messed up and Skuld's robots working overtime to
finish fixing things. (And of course it would be beautiful by the
itme our hero comes to at the end).
Ok.. well in my story.. Yggdrasil the Tree is seperate from Yggdrasil the
Computer - I guess it might have been an interesting thing to have
happen, but I wanted to keep them seperate (besides... if something
*actually* happened to the tree... it'd really stuff things up.. since
Yggdrasil 'supports' most of the different kingdoms (heaven, hell, etc,
etc) it'd make from some serious problems for me (the author) to
overcome....
I also would have expected Belldandy to have removed her limiter and
kicked some serious Demon posterior, but then again I'm a Bell-chan
fan and this is Brett's and Urd's story.
Hmm... well Belldandy probably would have gotten upset if Keiichi had
been hurt.. he wasn't... but remember that Thor and Apollo are 1st-Calss
Gods too and they weren't holding back at all...
It was truly nice when Nilthar got to the "oh, shit!" part; he was too
clever by half....
Yes... I've noticed that *most* villians seem to out-think themselves...
A nit: while you don't say this, I got the impression Chia-Yao's
armour was just Kevlar (you ought to capitalize it, since it's a
Dupont trademark); modern body armour plates might include Kevlar in a
composite include ceramic, metal, etc., but Kevlar by itself is a
rather soft fiber/cloth, and asorbs kinetic energy by fiber
deformation. Chia-Yao would definitely use lots of plates, probably
on top of a chain-mail/Kevlar underlayer (Kevlar by itself is bad at
stopping bladed weapons).
OK... I didn't want to put in a whole discourse about body armour and the
different types, so I simplified it down a bit.. most people would
recoginse Kevlar as being part of Body armour??? well anyway I guess
his armour would be more like ceramic inserts/perhaps even a light
metalic substance... anyway... tell me this: would Kevlar burn???
I'd also expect on of the Security Daemons to be carrying a SAW or
the like small belt fed machine gun, or at least a battle rifle and
bayonet; a shotgun might be useful, but pistols in Hell would be ...
too sporting, I'd thing.
And where would they CARRY a belt-fed machine gun???? Hmm??? I mean
pulling out a shotgun is quite reasonable.. but I didn't want to go
overboard....
Anyway, it was very nice, although the side story was the best of the
lot; well worth the wait.
Thankyou - I appreciate that...
-----Brett
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