I'm sorry...I got this far and had to stop...the Crys Saga was bad enough at
times without having what looks like somthing a lot like it starting
up...anyways...as useful C&C, you might want to describe just what "Robert"
and "Dion" *LOOK* like...(Another of the reasons I like prose...it almost
forces you to describe things very well) this entire thing (as far as I read
anyways) needs more description! We didn't know Robert was wearing ANYTHING
until Ranma pointed out a chain...how did Robert know he had MOVED somewhere
to ask "Where am I?" afterthe flash of light, etc...in short...it needs
work...lots of work...

Thanx for the c&c, i realize im not a very good writer..but im working on 
it! and by the way, i liked the crys-saga alot, i dont see why others
hated it so much.