Subject: Re: [FFML] Ranko 1/2 C&C
From: Sebastian Weinberg
Date: 5/23/1996, 7:38 AM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com


On Thu, 23 May 1996, James Bateman wrote:

Well, I can honestly say that it was interesting - actually, I rather
enjoyed it, but I do have one or two concerns -

First of all, there are a lot more opportunities to get doused with cold
water than there are with hot... it seems to me that you risk losing a
large comedic element always keeping Ranko [sic] in her 'cursed' form.

Yep, I know.  But under the influence of the Tendous Ranko will slowly 
begin to spend about half her time as a girl.

Though I thought the bit with the pool (Ranma, the pool is *heated*!) was a
very nice touch. ^_^

At first I was trying to think of a way to change her back some other 
way, but then I decided to keep the pool and lull them in security - 
until Akane shouts. :)

Second, while it seems to me that there is a certain lessening of the
initial conflicts (say the fact the Kunou wants to date Ranma and he is
really a boy) there is also a certain potential there for some really new
ones... (Will Akane and Ran(ko)ma really decide to marry?) - as well as
exploring some more... unusual aspects of the characters.  (I can see some
really *interesting* lemons coming out of this one.)

Ah, but I *did* the obligatory f/f lemon already. :)

This story will more focus on the emotional relations than on the
citrus-flavoured ones. :)

Then there is the reversal of the twit factor.  Ranko is a bit short
tempered, but not as much as Akane.  While Ranma was a jerk most of the
time, Ranko is fairly polite until pushed, and Akane pushes as hard as
ever.  Here, *Akane* is the jerk - and I think that could get interesting
if properly handled.

I certainly wanted to keep the, um, *wild* character of Ranma-chan intact 
for this fic.  But Ranko doesn't have Ranma's arrogance over girls *and* 
she has been hiding something almost all of her life and thus is a little 
more polite sometimes.

You say that you already have the ending relationships worked out... I will
be interested to see what you do with them...

I don't really want to give that away, yet.  Also, Characters have the 
habit of evolving during the writing and not obeying plans anymore. :)

As for Genma, well, all things considered, I can certainly see how he would
act as he has done.   Given his character (lack thereof) I can easily
believe that he would have deliberately cursed his daughter.  And Soun's
reaction to Ranko's "sacrifice" is also perfectly in character.

Thanks.  Some have told me that it seems a little too much for Genma.  *I*
certainly could picture him being so concerned with keeping the vow that
he'd completely fail to consider the feelings of the children. 

On the whole, I shall be interested to see precisely where you are going
with this.

Looking forward to future installments,

Thanks for your positive comments.

Sebastian
-- http://enterprise.mathematik.uni-essen.de/~bastian/ Comics reviewed.
-- What good is having someone who can walk on water if you don't follow in his footsteps?