'Skywise' spoke:

well here is the complete third part
please send me C+C I love any that I get
Even a flame would be better than nothing

Well, you asked for it, here are my flam...er, helpful commentary:

Warped Reality Part 3

	Conrad was breathing hard, As might be expected his first day of 
Kendo was mainly to get him into shape and test his natural ability.  As he 

...breathing hard.  As might be expected, his first day...

just seems to take everything so seriously, would you believe that she anted 

									wanted

before she ran off to cram school.  

before she had to run off to cram school.

Well, this was quite an improvement!  I suspect that since this was version 3.02
you had a chance to find and correct a lot of the problems that everybody
writes into early drafts.  Keep it up, though I havn't seen much cross-over
yet.
thats what part four is four.  hehe 

Kelly Conrad Davies Schultz
kellys1@randolph.spa.edu but only till june 10
Shade and sweet water.
Skywise

P.S. read Sailor Moon V    and the Circe Prodject
     and Bubblegum Zone    and Tokyo Babylon
     and Knights End       and Sailor Moon Refugees
     and Sailor Moon M     and The Wheel of Time
     and Honor Harrington  and Sour Times