At 01:52 AM 5/22/96 -0500, you wrote:

On Mon, 20 May 1996, Mr. the Rutsch wrote probably one of the silliest 
lemons since "Lemonade."

Criticisms, though: Ranma seems a tad too reflective here, and is more 
eloquent and has a larger vocabulary than he usually does. For instance:

     And it isn't just at the melodramatic moments, either.  It's just
been a few days since the last time.  We were at the park.  Akane had
gone through a difficult day, so to let off a little steam she was
goofing around some on the playground.  You know...going down the
slide, climbing the beams and ladders, like a little kid or something.
I wish you could have seen it.  She was so beautiful.  There was this
big smile on her face...obvious elation at long-forgotten childhood
pleasures.  She so easily tossed her worries aside.  I wish I could do
that.  It was so beautiful in her.  Oh god.  I almost told her I loved
her.  And I couldn't.  I started the sentence.  But I couldn't finish.
And when she prompted me to continue...I just yelled at her.  Oh
god...

  "Obvious elation at long-forgotten childhood pleasures?" Ranma doesn't 
talk like that, does he? Most people don't; certainly Ranma doesn't.
  He's a little wordy too, wordier than normal.
  Example above: "Akane had gone through a difficult day..."
  I'd have Ranma just say something like "Akane'd had a bad day..."
  Or Akane outside the school, in what was otherwise a great scene:

but then again, in Calvin & Hobbes, Calvin uses big words too.
it's just part of the humor.

signed, phoneynt
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