This is an excellent story!  It's nice to see a reason to Kasumi's apparent
ditziness. :)

A few comments:

"Kasumi, 
do you want to help?"

A thought - it seemed a little "off" for the mother to keep calling Kasumi
"Kasumi".  Maybe "Kasumi-chan" would help show a little affection between
mother and daughter?

Ranma and 
Saotome-ojisan going for their morning workout.

Ojiisan (note - this has a double 'i') = Grandfather (other people's or talk
to yours).  Is she *really* calling Genma 'Grandfather'?  The options on
'father' are:

Otoosan (other people's or talk to yours)
Chichi (talk about yours)

"Do we have the money for the roof repair, Nabiki-oneechan?"

I know someone has already told you about 'oneesan' being used for OLDER
sisters (other people's or talk to yours [Talk about your older sister =
'Ane']) and how the corresponding options for YOUNGER sisters are
'Imootosan' (other people's or talk to yours) and 'Imooto' (talk about yours).

But another option is to have the sisters '-chan' each other (or at least
have Kasumi '-chan' her younger sisters)

"Whatcha do that for?!?"  Ranma glared at Saotome-ojisan.

Ojisan lowered the kettle.  "You can stop now.  The Okaasan knows everything, 
Ranma, my boy."

"What?"  Embarrassed (and why wouldn't he be, wearing that pink dress?), 
Ranma turned and faced Dr. Tofu's Okaasan.

I thought the little old lady was Dr. Tofu's grandmother.  If so, she'd be
Dr. Tofu's Obaasan.


Again, nice story. :)


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