Peter L. Ward wrote:

This is probably among one of the best fanfics I've read in a long time.  You
sure this is your first one? ^_^  Very well done and it really develops
Kasumi's character quite a bit.

<blush>  Thanks very much.  It's what I was hoping for.  I have always had the 
opinion that Kasumi is not the airhead everyone thinks she is.
 

One thing I must point out, though, is the use of "oneechan/san/sama" in it.
"Oneechan" means "older sister" not just "sister",  so Kasumi shouldn't be
referring to either Nabiki or Akane as such (nor should Nabiki refer to Akane
as "oneechan").  The term that would be more appropriate would be "imooto",
which means "younger sister".  Just thought you should know.

Thanks again, Peter, this is exactly the kind of criticism I was looking for.  
"Imooto", eh?  Is there a diminutive form of this, like "Imooto-chan"?

I really appreciate your comments.

-Richard
sterman@sprynet.com