Excerpts from mail.fanfic: 17-May-96 Re: [FFML] Blue Lightning, .. by
"Mike W. Loader"@scs.unr 

A short C&C session....
   Interesting. Certainly not the normal FFML fare; I have no idea if its
based off an Anime series, but I doubt it.

Nope, it's not.  A looong while back, before I ever came to CMU, I'd had
a really wierd dream.  All I can remember of it is a female sea-dweller
diving off of a cliff into the water.  Nothing else.  But it, together
with a "sequel" dream about a year and a half later, (*grin*) provided
the basis for "Blue Lightning".

   Excellent writing in this. Crisp, vivid imagery, decent emotional
description. My biggest quibble is the lack of intial information and
explaination - I was never exactly sure why Damon and Co. were heading to
the past: was it to start a new life in a pioneer fashion, change history,
or something else? This is probably explained later on, but it caused me a
bit of confusion.

Thanks for telling me that!  I never really did describe that very well
in the prologue, which I forgot to post along with this.  I'll fix that up
again and post it too, along with a few more segments of this in a little
while.

       The year is 2008.  Overcrowding, a totalitarian government, and
vicious, constantly infighting intelligence agencies plague the world.
It's not a nice place to live.

   So nothing's changed since the present day, huh? ;)

Not much.  See the prologue.  ;)

   Another teasing lapse....what was this secret Damon's lost love was
hiding? Who was she? Why were....again, this had better be answered later
on. I hate nagging little questions.

It gets answered later on.  You get lots of hints as to who she is during
the first volume.  You don't find out exactly until the beginning of the
second.

   Course, that also ensures that I'm gonna have to read part two. :)
   You might want to describe the seadweller in a bit mort detail. All be
really know about his physical apperance is that he's humanoid, has a
implant-type thing, and is heavy.

I made a note to myself about that.  Look for a better description in
either a future revision of this part, or a coming part, wherever I can
best find a place for it.  Most likely when the doctor is scanning him,
before he sends me and Steve outside.  ^_-

       Behind us, a menacing black chopper rose into view, closing
rapidly.  Kerin looked back, fearful.
       "Looks like we've got company.  Keep your head down."

DOH! Black UN helicopters! The miltia dudes were right after all! ;)

*grin*  Glad you noticed the reference!  ^_-

   Now, if I were a evil government intelligence agency, I'd paint all my
helicopters a really ugly day-glo pink and yellow. :)

Ew.  You've got a sick, twisted mind.  8)

   Overall, I liked it. And if you don't repost the others, at least tell
me the answers to the above. :)

I'll get to work on it right away!  Before the taskmistress can bug me.
You're friendlier than she is when she's taskmistressing.  *giggle*

Damon Casale, scyth@andrew.cmu.edu

				* Love *
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