On Mon, 13 May 1996, Paul Corrigan wrote:

	Ukyo walked over to the grill and turned it on.  "One deluxe 
okonomiyaki, coming right up.  And then, how about a game of poker?"
	"But I don't have any money."
	*We could play strip poker...*  "Oh, well, we'll think of
something."

   Tee hee...(A bit OOC, though; Ukyo comes off, from what I've seen of 
her in the comic and elsewhere, as being incredibly innocent. That may have 
been the point--she might not be, really--but it's still a bit shocking. 
I really can't see her playing strip poker outside a lemon fanfic.)

Didn't know that.  The episodes with Ukyo aren't out yet.  I've had to go
by the OAV's and fanfics.

	Skuld smiled at her pupil.  "The way to a man's heart is through
his stomach.  And with the way he eats..." 
	It was hours before Akane could think of Ranma eating without
falling down laughing. 

   Trust me: if that were true he'd be engaged to Kasumi. *duck*

Skuld was making a joke at Ranma's expense.  Also, she wants Akane to
equate cooking well with winning him.  (Even though she'll deny wanting
him.)

	Ranma was whistling as he walked home later that night.  *I wonder
why she reacted so oddly when I said we could play for something else.  Oh
well.  That game 'Hearts' was fun too.  Even though I lost.*

Someone needs to buy Ranma a clue. A girl has her needs, ya know...:) 

Hearts.  A subtle clue indeed.  ^_-

	Halfway there, a small notice on a pole caught his attention.  "No
way!  Martial Arts...  So that's why!  I should have known there's a
competition for it."

Why what? I'm lost.

All will be explained.  (Look at the next chapter's title)

	"Don't worry Tendo, we'll think of something.  Don't we always?" 
	Soun stopped and thought for a few minutes.  Finally, he answered. 
"No, not always." 

Do they ever? :)

Um...  No.

    Chapter Ten -- Martial Arts Okonomiyaki Making?!?

   You might want to change the title. Okonomiyaki I don't think is even 
mentioned in the chapter.

It's not.  Remember the scene when Ranma shuts Ukyo up?  Now put the
notice, this title, and his actions together.  Add a scene with Nabiki and
mix well.  You've just made trouble stew.  (Skuld's own recipe.)

show-off when he had a chance, it was to noone's surprise that he was
currently skating backwards, three feet in front of Akane, taunting her to
catch him.  Peter never was very bright.(1)

You mean Peter Noone, as you say in your note. Just who is that, anyway?

Heh.  Ask Mike Loader.

	"Nabiki, I found this in Ranma's room.  Do you think I should show
it to Akane?"

Do we even want to know?

I'll give you a hint.  Remember the flyer?

	*Ow.*
	"Ukyo!  What are you doing here?"

After going back and reading this again I gathered it is Akane saying 
this, but at first I thought it was Ranma (which made no sense as he then 
says "Ucchan, are you okay?" You might want to make that a bit clearer; 
as it is it's a bit confusing.

ok, will do.

	"Just keeping in shape."  *Looking for you.* "Different kinds of
exercise for different muscles."  *Looking for you.* "You know what I
mean."

   Ohhhh...:(
   I can't read that last passage without thinking I'm going to cry.
   (That's me. Really. I know *exactly* what you're getting at. That's not 
easy. [Now I know why I like Ukyo so much...] Excellent. Excellent.) 

Thanks.  I'm trying to paint her as fixated, but not dangerously so.

	"Oh Akane, are you en... MRMPH!!"  Ukyo stared at Ranma as he
jumped to cover her mouth.

   Hmm...just what was Ukyo trying to say? Of course Akane shouldn't be 
able to figure out what, but the reader should. It wasn't terribly clear 
to me. (Of course I may have missed something...) A few more letters in 
"en..." are called for.

No problem.

	"Oh Akane, are you enter... MRMPH!!"

Better?

	He turned and headed south.  If he had been lucky, that would be
the way he wanted to go.  But he wasn't.	

   Ryoga can't win, can he?

Not with Ranma around.