I'm impressed... it is not often that I read something in
      which I 
can truly say I hurt for a character.  Any flaws I found (not many)
have already been pointed out (mostly grammatical), but there was
one point which deserves further consideration.
      As it has already been said, it is not likely that Ranma, even
      in 
girl-form (though he IS considerably weaker in that form) could be
physically defeated by ordinary thugs except under extreme
circumstances.  Note that I didn't say it's impossible... strange
things happen for which there is little explanation... but it is not
likely.  It would add to the story a good deal if a reason for his
defeat were more clear.

It is.

      Otherwise, an excellent piece of work, covering a very
      difficult 
subject.  A question, and a possible answer: Why does Akane suddenly
discover a ki-power?  The only possible reason I can see is that her
concern for Ranma and her desire to protect her has brought about a
new level of resolution in her... perhaps it can be attributed to
the sheer force of will which she is exerting to keep things under
some level of control?  If this is, or is not, the case, you might
want to elaborate on it some more.

More to a state of shock than anything else on her part.

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"But mostly, you learn to close your eyes and tell youself,
'This just isn't happening.'"
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