At 10:15 AM 5/6/96 -0700, you wrote:

Ok, here it is, my frist FanFiction. Please read it. I think the first 
few parts aren't exactly exciting and I'm a bit off but I'll let you see 
for yourself. 

I'll tell you that I made one error on Akane in my first part. Can you 
point it out? It's obvious I think to anyone who's read the manga. 
Anyway, read this and the next 4 parts because by the time it gets to 
part V, it'll start getting better. Thanks!

			  Oh My Pigtailed Goddess!   
				By Jack Ji   

I got to the point where it said you'd been in Japanese for 2 days and no
further...If you're going to write somthing, don't write in every little
thing, like not remembering to do the dishes and wasting a couple sentences
describing what you did.  I reccomend MAJOR re-writes on this...weed out
everything that makes no sense and that is completely irrelavent.  And
before anyone asks no I have not written any fanfics yet, but I know enough
that padding is PADDING.



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