On Mon, 6 May 1996, Aaron Stolz wrote:

I got to the point where it said you'd been in Japanese for 2 days and no
further...If you're going to write somthing, don't write in every little
thing, like not remembering to do the dishes and wasting a couple sentences
describing what you did.  I reccomend MAJOR re-writes on this...weed out
everything that makes no sense and that is completely irrelavent.  And
before anyone asks no I have not written any fanfics yet, but I know enough
that padding is PADDING.

I always thought detail was important. Besides, then no one asks me 
questions like "What happened to him?" or "Howcome he didn't say 
anything?" or something like that. I do that little detail stuff to get 
rid of them for a little while. Thanks for your criticism! I have to tell 
you, this is the most positive one I"ve had so far. ^^;Be on the look for 
part II tomorrow. 

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