At 07:09 PM 5/2/96 -0700, you wrote:

"Lolita"
by: Jeff Rutsch

(SNIP THE 'FIC!)

Hello!

Hello!
 Kendra: Hello!

What do you think?

I like :)
 Kendra: you like everything with Skuld in it
So?

When I released "Skuld", part of the "Three Sisters" thing, Charles

Three sisters thing?

Lewis commented on the matchup of Skuld and Keiichi, and the "Lolita"
type relationship they would have.  I didn't think much of it at the
time, until I recently showed "Skuld" to a friend and he made the
exact same comment.  'Course I claimed some random pervert on the 'Net
wrote "Skuld" ^_^.

"Skuld"?

Okay, I've never seen the book or read the movie "Lolita", and all I
know about it is a one-sentence description, but I imagine it to be a
neurotic tale of sexual obsession, so I tried to imitate that imagined
feel in this short.

I'm going to have to find that book....
  Kendra: Isn't it borderline porn?
I really don't know, but I positive the library's got it..
  Kendra: ALL of the ladies who work there know you, what will they think
when you get           a book like that?
Not say anything?
  Kendra:  you know better than that...

I'd be *very* interested in comments and suggestions (more than usual,
even ^_^).  Some things I've been thinking about: Should I go more
into the mental conditions that drive Keiichi to go into this state?
Should I kill the "+ -" conversations?  Is his self-denial too
apparent or not apparent enough?  Should I lengthen the short?
My original design included two more scenes at the end: Keiichi
feeling repentant and trying to take Belldandy to a love hotel (he 
can't), and another conversation with Skuld where he seems to admit his 
feelings. I could see wanting to lengthen things up between scenes, maybe.

I really don't know...When I like somthing there's very rarely a reason, I
just like it....  I'm 'bout as helpful as a speedometer on a snail, aren't
I? ^_^

Thanks for reading,

You're welcome!

  Kendra: I'm still feeling ill over Gun dreams...
  Aaron: Just don't think about pizza...or hamburgers, or spaghetti, or
tomato paste, or...
  Kendra: [runs away even faster than before to the bathroom]
  Aaron: *snicker*
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