*whimper*
   Very, very good. Dark as all hell, but good.
   I rather liked the intro, myself. And I think that Ranma yelling at her
like that is very much in character for him. Let's face it, the guy is
impulsive, protective of Akane, has almost the same awareness of other
people's feelings as his father, and...well, he'd say it. He'd forget and
forgive a week or two later, mind you...
   Somehow I don't think Nabiki would "twist the knife". She's amoral, not
sadistic.
   Has anyone noticed that Ukyo is a favorite target for tragic fanfics?
There's "Stepping stones", "Death of Ukyo", "Lies", she goes berserk in
"Ranma 2093", I used her as Gory-demonstration-character in "Smoke and
Mirrors"....I wonder why?

- Mike of No Particular Title or Handle
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