Okay...

I think the emotions in the first part of it weren't done well enough.  
Normally I wouldn't be so picky about that, but I've been at the end of 
my rope.  It's a little more intense than that (starts wiping the 
understatement from the floor).  

Sorry.  I probably shouldn't get that picky, I know...but the last few 
seconds, as she was going through with it, should have been done far 
better than that. 

Other than that, the 'fic was good.  One thing I noticed was the way 
Ranma was affected by it.  A very good job, there...his blaming himself, 
with the need to make amends.  No offense, but I don't think Nabiki would 
have played the song like that.  Maybe it's naivete on my part, but I 
can't see anyone doing something that cruel.  

Overall, a good job.

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