"I was  just..."  she stammered, then rushed past him through the
doorway.  Tears spilled from her cheeks. She slipped into her room and
slammed the door.  Confused, Ranma peered after her, then sulked. 
"Is she still mad? She must be.  How am I going to fix this one?"  He
definitely couldn't think it through on an empty stomach, so he walked
back down the stairs to the table.

Hmmm.....I liked Ranma's reaction better in the first version of this 
that you posted (where he thinks, "She's really gonna think I'm some kind 
of pervert now," or something like that).
Or does he not see that she was looking through the box?  If he doesn't, 
then this one works well.

     I did too, actually.

	"Well, I just lost my appetite," stated Nabiki.

Maybe just use 'said' here instead of 'stated.'  'Stated' almost draws 
attention away from what she's saying.

     Good idea. Or maybe something to show her distaste. (groaned, murmered,
etc)

the Tendous.  He turned into his room; his mind jolted out of it's 

Maybe:  room.  His mind  

     Nope, this is better. :) (I like long sentences)

 Suddenly the room went white.  Akane stiffened and pulled

back.  Ranma spun around, blinking.  Soun stood in the doorway, crying, a
camera in front of his face.  A Polaroid drifted down to the floor.
	"Oh, wonderful!  We'll set the wedding for tomorrow!  It's official! 
Sealed with a kiss!"

HA HA HA!!  HA HA HA HA HA HA HA!!!!

     My thoughts exactly.

from the picture.  Slowly (sadly?) He walked to the closet, and bent down

(sadly?) he walked

   (sadly?), he walked

Also, everyone remember to put ONE space after periods, even with monospaced
type. (I was involved in a discussion with various people who should know,
one being a professional typesetter, the others being fellow students--only
their major was printing & publishing).

More more more!

     Yes.

[Win95]: Proud of yourself?

He should be!

Well, ya.  For a first attempt I figure it's pretty good.

Oh, it _is_!

     Yes, and he's going to keep it up? Right? (I hope)

[Win95]: But it's only 20k!
Hey, size has no bearing on quality.

Yeah!  So :P BEEEEEEE!!

[Win95]: I take up 70megs...
Like I said, size has no bearing on quality!

Heh heh. :)

     Well, Zone is 2.3 megs of text....

Wait a minute...what was I just talking to...?
NANI?  Win95 is now a SIG CHARACTER??  Noooooooo!!
(faints)

     Unfortunately, he hasn't gotten the idea to threaten Win95 properly.

J-Win95 is my machine, named 'Junior' because of the case (right between a
mini-tower and a mid-tower; it's a junior tower). It's modded like crazy (I
don't know what all I'm running with it), and a quite tame--now!

[J-Win95]: What do you mean, threaten me properly?
Oh, you forget, I have a linux CD here.
[J-Win95]: And that's gonna threaten me?
Well, let's see. It *ALWAYS* pre-emptively multitasks, has a better file
system, it can connect to the internet, I can run Win16 programs under
it--as well as DOS stuff, it's more stable than you are.
[J-Win95]: Yeah. So, I'm easier to use!
True, I like your interface better, but I can use Unix. I can use Unix quite
well, thank you.
[J-Win95]: SO! You won't uninstall me!
<grabbing a Linux CD to hold up to my monitor>
[J-Win95]: I'LL BE GOOD! I PROMISE!
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BGC Otaku and worshipper of the Red-Eyed Goddess and her music.
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Author of the Bubblegum Crisis theme pack (see the homepage below).
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