Good story.  However, it seems like Ranma and Akane returned to normal just a 
bit too quickly.  Don't you think Ranma will at least try to be nice for a while 
after Akane almost died?  I like your interpretion of how Akane and Ranma felt 
about love.  It seems to be very accurate and logical.  However, it seems to me 
that by now they must have realize they love each other, just that they wouldn't 
admit it yet.  Finally, toward the ending... I always thought Ranma would have 
confess his love and kiss Akane first, but then that's just my personal opinion. 
Otherwise, it is very consistent with the Ranma 1/2 story and very well-written. 
Keep up the good work!

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naze motto shizuka ni "suki da yo" to ienai no?
haraiu to watashi mo jajauma ni natchau!

Why can't you say "I love you" more quietly?
Whenever we rival each other, I too become a shrew! - Jajauma ni sasenaide 
(Don't make a shrew) aka "Don't make me run wild like you".  First opening song 
from Ranma 1/2.

"Gave me your best shot... if you're prepared for the void!" - Magus from Chrono 
Trigger 

Don Wang <dwang@sprynet.com>
RPG, strategy game, and Ranma 1/2 fan.
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