On Wed, 17 Apr 1996 17:11:37 -0400 Ross McKenzie said:

	This version makes a _lot_ more sense.  Good rewrite.
	You need to change when the commander gave up being a mech
pilot.  The Clans have only been fighting the Inner Sphere for about
seven years at this point.  That's not enough time for the Ghost bears to
kill someone 20 years ago.
	The Batchall went well, except that I'm not sure escape counts as
being freed from bondsman status.  I'd think the clans would just assume
you were a bondsman with no honor.  Plus the terms of the fight are a
little odd.  Why would Jade Falcons want Spheroid mechs?  They'd want
something more (like the entire planet).
	Unless you pull something sneaky, there's no way eight Inner
Sphere mechs will be able to fight eight Omnimechs.  I've beat two lances
with one star before.
	Oh, and I think Herb's hair is half-blue, half-white, but I'm not
sure about that.

I am.  It's (looking at cover to Manga v. 24) white with a blue streak on
top and blue strands in front of the ears.

Nightelf
nwl9354@tamvm1.tamu.edu

Ross